all the bean poles put away,
the garden flat and empty,
accessories of summer gone
I see the barren white to come,
the frozen slope of winter.
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©️2018 Ontheland
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A nice vision of the future if only brief, in both word count and vision.
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Groovy. 🥀😎
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I love this. There’s such a sense of bleakness and yet acceptance.
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Thanks Claudia…I oscillate between the bleakness and acceptance and enjoying the beauty of the season.
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It shows in your poem. Very moving, I thought.
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I’m glad you ‘felt it’.
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I agree with Claudia. Well done! I had to look up gogyohka. 🙂
I’m not ready for winter. I would like to enjoy some warm sunny days and cool nights for a bit, but we don’t seem to be getting many of them.
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Thank you, Merril. There is not as much info about gogyohka’s out there as I would like and I was surprised that there is another Japanese term for five-lines that are free of rules…anyway I like a name for tankas that don’t want to conform to syllable counts or other tanka conventions. We had a beautiful cool clear day yesterday and I am hoping for some more of those…so much rain lately!
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I love this Janice. It’s a very tight little poem for free form. For what it’s worth, I much prefer this kind of poem to the very highly structured haiku and tanka. This has just enough lee way to really blossom.
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Thank you Jane… it felt like a tanka at first but it didn’t want to be squeezed into a tanka…your words make me think of an adage I’ve heard in another context: ‘not too tight not too loose’
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Sometimes you know what you want to say, and the form just has to take the strain.
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There is a definitely melancholy air to the change of seasons. Everything about this expression of that is just right.
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