all the bean poles put away,

the garden flat and empty,

accessories of summer gone

I see the barren white to come,

the frozen slope of winter.


©️2018 Ontheland

12 thoughts on “empty

  1. I agree with Claudia. Well done! I had to look up gogyohka. 🙂
    I’m not ready for winter. I would like to enjoy some warm sunny days and cool nights for a bit, but we don’t seem to be getting many of them.

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    1. Thank you, Merril. There is not as much info about gogyohka’s out there as I would like and I was surprised that there is another Japanese term for five-lines that are free of rules…anyway I like a name for tankas that don’t want to conform to syllable counts or other tanka conventions. We had a beautiful cool clear day yesterday and I am hoping for some more of those…so much rain lately!

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  2. I love this Janice. It’s a very tight little poem for free form. For what it’s worth, I much prefer this kind of poem to the very highly structured haiku and tanka. This has just enough lee way to really blossom.

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    1. Thank you Jane… it felt like a tanka at first but it didn’t want to be squeezed into a tanka…your words make me think of an adage I’ve heard in another context: ‘not too tight not too loose’


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