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on a clover path
in the gentle hum of bees
village sounds are near (my hokku)
the temple bell stops but I still hear
the sound coming out of the flowers
(final two lines from Basho—see below)
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For this Carpe Diem Tan Renga challenge Chevrefeuille offers a twist. Instead of asking for a response to a featured haiku, he has provided the final two lines for which we are to write a haiku (hokku) to precede it. Basho’s words are taken from his haibun ‘Narrow Road into the Deep North’.
Ontheland 
oh absolutely well done Janice ~ you’ve handled the twist in the challenge really well – I think you’ve served Basho’s “closing/end lines” superbly well!
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Thank you Pat…it was a bit of a twist to imagine backwards.
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I know what you mean, – I’ve been thinking on it – so it is hard to “back-step it into being” – but you’ve really captured the essence and spirit I think; very impressive.
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Thanks again Pat.
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You did a great job Janice. I was aware of the difficulties you have encountered.
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A little extra difficulty is the nature of a twist 🙂
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Such Fabulousness! 😎🥀
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Thank you 🙂
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I do wonder if the honey is different from pink or white clover…
Nicely done. 🙂
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I believe I’ve had red clover honey in the past…not as common as white clover honey here…and yes the flavour and colour varies with the flowers. Thanks Jules…I enjoy thinking about honey 🙂
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Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
#Haiku Happenings #5: Janice’s latest tan #renga featuring Basho for Carpe Diem!
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Thank you Frank 🙂
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Beautifully crafted, Janice and your start slips easily into the final two lines. Closing my eyes I can hear the gentle hum of bees … always the magic enthralling sound of clover meadows!
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Thank you, Annika. I have the same hum in my garden. At first I was quite nervous about being stung but I’ve become much more relaxed…they’re not into confrontation any more than I am.
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So well done, Janice! The lines flow together seamlessly. I can hear the gentle buzzing, too.
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Thank you, Merril.
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You’re welcome!
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The imagery is so mice! I feel myself there. ❤
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I mean, nice lol
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Thank you 🙂
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