Cautious
in her precious new van
she backs up
slow, careful, alert
checking each mirror
All of a sudden
reflexes snap
her foot slams
Is it sound or impact?
her brain detects
a sickening crunch
A short iron post has jumped
into her path
~
This is a quadrille (44-word poem) using the dVerse quadrille word of the week: ‘crunch’….The story is fiction.
©2017 Ontheland
Ontheland 
Superb Suspense! 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Thanks Dorna 🙂
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I can imagine that accident happening. It is not easy to see such a post if it is too low.
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Yes low posts and other low objects can resist detection… unless you have backup cameras perhaps…
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Oh dear. That sound and the sinking heart…that’s a crunch,too, I think…
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So true…a squeeze in the chest
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Ugh. That sucks. Loved your title, and the spill of this brings exactly the right degree of dread.
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Thanks…not my usual genre (suspense) 😉
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I said “Oh no,” aloud after the first two lines. I have experienced the same thing recently (only it was a post in the garage) in my new crossover vehicle. You caught me right at the beginning. Not a good crunch.
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Not the loud or dramatic kind, just expensive
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Nasty-sounding crunch!
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Yikes on hearing that sickening crunch….enjoyed the suspense until the end ~
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Thanks Grace
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Haven’t had a post jump right in front of me, but I have had a couple of bumpers reach back and kiss mine! Love your description!
Dwight
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Thanks 🙂 love those reaching bumpers!
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Thanks!.
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I have done things like that… things jumping out of nowhere. That crunch means trouble
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Oh, Janice, I think I’ve heard that sickening crunch and have come across the short iron post – it gets around!
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Oh! I felt that!
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OOOPS!
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Oh dear, this crunch can be felt across a miles! Hope you are OK ☺💜 xxx
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I’m well thanks…it’s a fiction based on past snippets of experience pulled together 🙂
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It works really well! 😉
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Janice, I can’t help laughing at the short Iron post jumping out in your way. It is your turn of phrase so forgive me. I realise you must have been very upset.
miriam
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It’s not a recent or specific past story (but I have been in vehicles and heard stories where low and hidden objects have suddenly emerged…and of course there are the horror stories of toddlers in driveways…
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well written man!i really liked your style of writting,appreciation from india!!
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