The other day I wrote a circular poem about gazing at a sunset and seeing a cloud arrow. There were aspects of that experience that I didn’t manage to capture, so this is ‘take 2’ using another form called a ‘troiku’
A troiku starts with a base haiku, followed by three more, each starting with a line from the base poem. You can read about how the troiku originated in the launch post by Chevrèfeuille.
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Sunset captivates, Mind surrenders in awe, Cloud paintings drift by. Sunset captivates, Calls me to view its display, Flashing red on grey. Mind surrenders in awe, A moment of oneness unfolds, Into joy's gentle caress. Cloud paintings drift by, A mysterious arrow Slowly disappears.
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This is gorgeous
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Thank you:)
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You’re welcome 🙂
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What a lovely troika, one of my favourite forms…I`m a sucker for sunsets as well. What was your “take 1” of this sunset?
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Thank you! My first take was ‘Cloud Arrow in Sunset Sky’: https://ontheland.wordpress.com/2015/11/28/cloud-arrow-in-sunset-sky/ . Thanks for asking, I’ve also added a link on the post.
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Thanks so much…I think I could publish a book just on sunsets:)
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I know what you mean. I have a ‘thing’ for them too 🙂
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